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Theres this moment I call
,The end of the beginning
When its suddenly quiet, and the world stops spinning.

When nobody asks and nobody gives,
When nobody dies and nobody lives.

When i can feel the breeze through my window,
I can feel the tears on my cheek
I can see some hope, and all of a sudden, it's not all so bleak.

Theres this moment I treasure,
When there's no pressure.
,It brings me such pleasure
A kind you can't measure.
Where i find pleasure,
A kind you can't measure.